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NPCs and Setting – Doing Them Better

After a break for a holiday to Malta and settling back into work I’m back at it after getting a lot of writing done whilst I was away. Almost the complete Act One of the first book of the new series I’m working on, as I said in my last post. It’s a total of 17,000 words spread over 6 chapters and that was mostly done over 4 days of the 7 day holiday as we did a few day trips around the beautiful Maltese islands.

If you ever get the opportunity you should go there, I’d recommend staying in the North like we did as it’s quieter but you are a short distance from the ferries to Gozo and can get buses/excursions to Valletta and other places.

One of the reasons I think I was able to get so much writing done is because of how I’ve changed my approach to outlining and sketching. I’m a firm believer in plotting v pantsing – it’s what works for me – but I realise that for Oranje I didn’t do enough for my characters or locations.

What I did before was a brief description of each character. Appearance, personality, key character traits and so on. But this time I’ve added in tag words. I came up with a list of 3 or 4 words that summed up each character and that could also be used to describe them in the book. I’ve also extended this approach to a lot of the key non-main cast characters so that each of those are well fleshed out when they appear in the book.

The sames been done for each location for the book. A brief description and then tag words that sum up and help visualise them.

I know I need to do more with the characters, and I now plan on doing an editing pass on this act. The aim being that as each one is done I polish and improve before moving on so each one is solid.

But I’m in a much better place to begin with this time, the characters are there and they feel more interesting. There’s more to shape their personalities from, and I can’t wait to finish the whole thing.

A Change of Paths

With moving house and a hectic schedule at work I’ve not posted much here recently and posting will remain infrequent for a while. However a change in my writing plans means I feel I have to.

Choices is on hold. I’ve got around a quarter of the way through, but I think I need to work on something else for a while to improve my writing.

I know I could deliver Choices  to a standard matching Oranje, and probably a step further forward, with where I am now with my skills. But to do so I think wouldn’t teach me much. The weak areas of my writing – the characters and description – won’t improve by working with the same setting or cast of characters.

So I’ve been working on a new idea. It’s set in the same universe as the September series, just a century or two further forward. I’ve done more work with this idea on having the characters more clearly defined first so that I can work their personalities into the story better, as well as focusing more on how I do description and the pacing of the story.

Hopefully this work and this new idea will help take my writing to the next level. Choices has not been abandoned, I will return and finish it and the rest of the September series. I just need to work on my skill as a writer first so when I do come back it is the best it can be.

Flash Fiction – Found in Space

This story was written to be part of a paid flash fiction anthology a few months ago. That’s no longer happening. Instead there’s going to be a free one that this will go out in, so I’m posting it here as well. Hope you enjoy.

* * * * *

The red dot glowed on the monitor.

“Are you sure?”

Chima turned to look at his twin brother, Sai, who was standing with his arms folded and one quizzical eyebrow raised.

Chima rolled his eyes. “The scanner doesn’t lie. There’s someone alive in that wreck.”

Sai peered out the window. “Well, whoever they are, they’re lucky they survived whatever happened.”

Their salvage craft floated alongside the exploded guts of a dead cargo vessel. The vessel had broken up into a dozen parts, the metal frame scattering out for ten thousand kilometres. They were focused on the largest bit that was still intact, inside which there was a single live human.

“What do you think happened?” asked Chima.

Sai shrugged his shoulders as his eyes surveyed the wreckage. “Reactor failure or something like that, does it matter?” He tapped his fingers against the window before turning to his brother. “Are you sure no one was reported alive?”

Chima tapped at his monitor. “All the company said was that something’d gone wrong and they needed someone to clear it up.” He leaned back with his hands resting on his head. “Nothing about survivors.”

“Double check, okay? Let’s get them on-board.” Sai winked at Chima. “This could be our lucky day.”

* * * * *

Hanne tried to block the flashing light with her arm. She was hunched over and naked, breathing hard. They’d put her in the airlock, said it was for decontamination. All she knew was she’d put her clothes into a drawer in the wall and then there were all these lights bombarding her. The walls were a metallic grey, and both doors were secure enough to keep her where she was.

She cleared her throat and spoke to the room. “Not that I’m ungrateful for you rescuing me and all, but when can I get my stuff back?”

A crackly voice came over the speakers. “We’ve run them through decon. They’ll be in your room once you’ve been cleared, as well.”

“How much longer will that take?” The flashing seemed to be speeding up.

“Only a few more minutes. Don’t worry, you’re safe here.”

Those “few minutes” seemed to drag on for a lot longer than that to her. It was a big relief when the interior door opened with a hiss of steam and a thud of moving gears. Trying to cover herself the best she could, she stepped into the ship. Her eyes took a moment to adjust to the darker lighting, but soon the shape of her two saviours came into focus.

Two tall men were looking at her—Chima and Sai, they’d said they were called—each completely identical. Both were smiling at her, and one of them held out a towel which she hastily wrapped herself in.

“Sorry that took so long. Had to make sure everything was alright,” he said. “I’m Sai, this is Chima.”

“Hey, don’t worry, I know you need to do it.” Hanne managed a smile. “It was just a bit too similar to where I’d been trapped for, well, I don’t even know how long it’s been.”

“Your craft was reported missing a few weeks ago,” said Chima. “We’re here to salvage what we can. We stumbled across your little life bubble by accident.”

“That was impressive work, surviving that long,” said Sai with a smile as he wrapped his arm around her. “I’m glad you’re safe now, and I’m sure you are as well.”

She nodded. A shiver ran down her spine and she realised how cold she was. “Where are my clothes?”

Sai pointed over his shoulder. “We’ve put them in a room. I’ll take you there now. Chima has stuff to do in the control room anyway.”

The two brothers smiled at each other before Sai guided her along the corridor.

It was no luxury ship they were living on, that was certain. They passed a few doors, none of which were anything flashy.

“This used to be a prison ship,” said Sai. He must’ve noticed what she was looking at. “We got her on the cheap when she was decommissioned. You’ll be safe in your room.”

He pulled open the third door they passed. Inside, it looked like much hadn’t changed from the ship’s previous life, but her clothes were piled neatly on the bed.

Sai waved her into the room. “Take the time to rest if you need it. We’ve got some work to do here before we head back to base. We’ll come and get you when it’s chow time.”

Hanne stepped inside and sat on the bed. She let out a sigh of relief and let her shoulders relax. Sai started to close the door.

“Wait!”

He poked his head through the doorway.

She smiled at him. “Thank you.”

He smiled right back at her. “Hey, it’s our pleasure.”

* * * * *

Chima heard Sai’s boots thumping up the stairs to the control room.

“Is she safe in her room?”

Sai nodded as he ducked beneath a beam. “Door’s locked and I’ve left her alone.” He licked his lips. “Did you check on the report?”

Chima grinned. With a few touches he brought the whole thing up onto the main display. “Well, as it says, ‘There are no survivors, wreck has only material worth now.’ No one knows she’s alive.”

Sai gripped his shoulder. “That means no one’s looking for her. Is everything ready?”

Chima reached under the desk and pulled out a bundle, which he unrolled. Tucked into sleeves was an array of knives to make any serial killer proud.

“You know what, brother? I think we’re going to eat well tonight.”

Moving Home and Discipline in Writing

Things have been quiet on here recently because of a momentous life occasion. Me and Clare now own our own house!

It’s been a bit stressful (as you can imagine!) but we’re now settling in and starting the process of making the place our own. However it has meant, along with being ridiculously busy at work, that my writing has been pretty much non-existent for the past few weeks.

I’ve managed a few bits and pieces, even outlining a 5 book series I’m going to do after the September series, but nothing on Choices. My priority is to get things settled down so I can get back into a rhythm with it. I find it easiest to write when I write every single day, and when I break the chain it’s difficult to get started again.

Discipline is important as a writer to make sure you do the simple task that is key to that title. Writing. You do that every day it becomes habit and the words flow more and more easily each time. You get lax, or slack off for a bit, and progress goes backwards.

Time to get on with it and get Choices done.

On Experimenting, a Breather, and Reviews

I’ve not been posting much here apart from the samples of Oranje recently, and that’s because I’ve been taking a little bit of a breather from the September series.

It’s only been a pause of a few weeks, but releasing Oranje and then diving straight into Choices was beginning to feel like it wasn’t allowing me a chance to look back at the book and learn some of the lessons from it.

This break has also been a nice chance to do some experimental writing. I already have plans for what I want to do once the September series is finished, but what style I do those books in is still up in the air. From what I’ve done so far I think I have a fairly conversation based writing, which has it’s positives and negatives. I’ve been trying out a few ways of writing to help bring out the pros and reduce the cons, such as help the dialog flow more and improve the setting/description.

One of the styles has been a sort of audio/video log, where it’s one person telling the story and then going into more details in scenes. The other is more of a non-fiction history book style, switching between interesting info sections and fly-on-the wall documentary bits. This way certainly draws on a lot of what I’ve read over the years as I’ve devoured a lot of non-fiction military history books.

This is still very much early messing around with some different ways of writing, but I’m pleased with how it’s been going. Both styles offer something, and there are lessons to be learnt that I can work into the writing of Choices to make it better.

I’d also be lying if I said the reviews of Oranje weren’t also a factor in this. On Amazon it’s sitting at a 4 star average, and around 3.3 stars on Goodreads. It’s not setting the world on fire, but no one wants to set it on fire so I’m fairly content with that. If I said I was happy I’d be lying, I want to amaze people with my writing but I’m obviously not at that level yet.

There have been positives in the reviews, but negatives as well. The word potential has been used a lot. I’m hoping this break to experiment a bit more with my writing, and to give me a bit more perspective on Oranje, will help me close the gap between that potential and the reality of my writing.

That’s the plan at least.

Bridging The Gap Between The First and Second Draft

With the first draft of Choices reaching 20,000 words, I want to talk about how I’m aiming in bringing the gap between the first and second draft closer.

The first draft for Oranje was really rough. Like, seriously sketchy in places. It clocked in around 65,000 words. For comparison, the final version of Oranje is 112,000 words. I basically rewrote the whole thing when doing the second draft, something I’m definitely hoping to avoid this time round.

What I think will aid me this time round is having a finished book under my belt. It’s not just the experience of doing a first and second draft, but also going through the editing process and knowing what parts of my own writing to look out for and improve.

There will certainly be work to do between the first and second drafts, that’s inevitable. My aim is to make it all about fixing and improving the story, not rewriting every chapter because I didn’t have the knowledge. The gap between getting both done for Oranje was over 3 months. This time round I’m aiming for one.

It’ll all be down to what I’ve learnt simply by writing and finishing a book.